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My Insane Ramblings.
i quit my other...i'm going back to bad poetry...
It IS DECIDED!!!!!
heart FINALLY! SOMEONE commented other than Winery! heart Thank you Nejiha!!! (even if are related to me and you said the same thing as Winery....)

Ok...Since it seems to be an Aynaunomus desision ( i miss spell check ...they need to add that...) I will stere the story in that direction...


wahmbulance wahmbulance Susan couldn't beleve it. She complained she was cold ONCE to her boss, and WHAT does he do? He Orders her to restock the freezers. swell....just plain swell...
What was wrong with the thermostat anyway? it says it's like 75 degree's In the store. And SHE just HAS to be freesing her butt off.

The fact was, She couldn't get anywhere the freezers. It was just to cold! She was going to get fired. She just knew it.
She stood int the asle near the freezers and considered her delema... she could beg one of the empoyies to do it for her, but all of them were in the main part of the store. And her boss wouldn't let them anyway. Seriously what WAS his problem any way? he was alwase on her back about evreything and he made evreything harder for her... and that wasn't ust petulance on her part either. The other employs comented on it sometines when they though that she couldn't hear.
Susan stared at the Variouse Icecreams and frozen dinners. hse had to get these in the freazer or else theyt would melt...

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She ended up not getting fired...mostly because she fainted in the middle of the Isle contemplating her dilema. Her boss had come looking for her and found her 'pale as a ghost, Cold as the dead and out like a dead Mouse!' personally she wasn't too fond of his description.

Susan stared up at the white hospital ceiling in dread. What would those Fools with peices of paper sayingthy could chop people to peices (she isn't to fon of Docters) 'diagnose' her with? she chuckled slightly. If they dianosed her with the 'Mysteriouse Illness' the was going to DIE laughing. briefly she wondered how the news was going to react if they heard that a hospital was diagnosing someone with there hox desiese... wahmbulance wahmbulance

ok, how was that? (and PLEASE reamember to COMMENT!!!)






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Winry_Rockbell799
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commentCommented on: Sat Jun 14, 2008 @ 06:15am
I like how you moved the story to the hospital and now she has to wait to know whether or not she has the illness. This also helps add to the tension I feel, cause I'm not sure if she has the illness or not, but i want to know now! I also like how you capture Susan's voice here, like how she thinks about the doctors lol XD yeah, i think your story is going great and i don't really have any suggestions, cause i think you're definately on the right track! XD let me know when you add more ^_^


commentCommented on: Sat Jul 05, 2008 @ 09:28pm
That was realy good please post more saku-chan! heart I realy liked it.... Does she have it? What do the docs say? WIll you pLEASE WRIGHT MORE?!!!!1



Nejiha
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Neko_Bri
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commentCommented on: Mon Jul 07, 2008 @ 01:04am
1)It's spelled Unanimous
2)Neat story!
3)Nejiha spelled write wrong.


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