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My Insane Ramblings.
i quit my other...i'm going back to bad poetry...
#13...the maids veiw
thanks for the comments guys!...erm...girls sweatdrop I really apriciate your constant suport....and now i have no clue what to write...but i'm gonna write any way and you guys tell me what to do next...

wahmbulance Nicolas pondered on His sisters reaction. She fainted, he didn't even know if that was posssible. it would seem like his parents hadn't told her....

Of course why would they? Why would they tell her that her older brother had been kidnaped just months before she was born? he had had the maid take her back to her room. She was asleep again. but he stillwas baffled on the matter that she fainted....How did you faint when your heart didn't beat and you didn't have to breathe?
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Susan had a masive headach when she woke up. and she had had the strangest dreams....She had the Hox desiese...and was at the hospital when a guy kidnaped her and claimed to be her brother....after telling her that he poisened her because she was dieing from a desiese that 'humans' wouldn't detect....

"Are you awake now miss?" Susan's eyes shot open, and she leapt out of her skin as the quiet voice startled her and brought her once again tothe real world.

"what the heck KNOCK next time!" susan had an hand at her thought and she was breathing hard. but her heart wan't hammering...her heart wasn't beating and it sounded l;ike a door shut in another house as the maid shut the door as she sliped in the room.

" I'm sorry, mis....but master...." she gulped " he gave me orders to see you down to lunch!" she blurted this out and susan jumped again.

" oh, man...it wasn't a dream then..." she slumped down and sighed deeply. she glanced back up at the maid...who was eyeng her wairly. "could you tell me more about...your....master?"

The maid's eye's got wide and she trembled. " he's so scary...but he pays well..." she gulped and looked confused. " he's never harmed any of us...but he...he ... he's so...cold..." she trembled when she looked back up at susan. " Your a lot like him....You set my teeth on edge...i cant help but think that your gonna kill me....I'm sorry...."

susan pondered this for a moment. " I'll never hurt you..." Susan sighed. "and i don't want to make you get in trouble...lets go aheadand try to make me presentable." she winked at the maid and the maid relaxed. "My name's Susan by the way." she said making her voice friendly.

the maid smiled slightly and relaxed a tiny bit. "My name's May..." susan smiled at her and they colabrated to get the clumsy Susan into a desent out fit. wahmbulance






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Nejiha
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commentCommented on: Tue Jul 22, 2008 @ 03:36am
That was sweet about the maid and stuff i dont know why but i thought it was sweet ....and it isn't suposed to be sweet but it is...


commentCommented on: Tue Jul 22, 2008 @ 05:46am
I like the little look into the maid's thoughts! if you have a character that shows up a lot like May, you might as well put a little depth in her! =D
Write on! (am I a broken record?)



Neko_Bri
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Winry_Rockbell799
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commentCommented on: Wed Jul 23, 2008 @ 07:13pm
I liked the part with the maid, too. It really shows how nice Susan is ^^ and I really want to find out more about her brother now. Please let me know when you post more.


commentCommented on: Sun Jul 27, 2008 @ 05:10pm
:] i like it (lol first comment)
its christina by the way..
britts sister?
with the black hair?
yeah, her
thats me :]
lol
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Her Heart Is In -Him-xXx
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ziana268vanter
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commentCommented on: Thu Sep 18, 2008 @ 10:03pm
nice this story is cool ^^ blaugh


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