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yo. guys. i been thinking. if i do restart DEMOX, i was thinking of adding a few things like well more fights. that would be my chance to improve upon my detail skills. so im gonna test something . i'll type some random scene and comment on how it is so tell yo friends to check this and stuff. this isn't even from DEMOX or anything else ive done so...yeah.

Mary let the steaming hot water run over her body. She smiled and sighed, feeling that the water was washing away her problems as well as dirt and grime that accumulated throughout the day. She then grabbed the bottle of shampoo in order to wash her hair. But before she put it on her, she stuck her head under the showerhead and wet her hair. Now with dripping wet hair she sqeezed the bottle and the pearl white shampoo into her free hand. Mary then put the bottle down and rubbed her hands together and scrubbed her hair and scalp with her fingers. The shmpoo turned from a gooey white liquid into a white scented lather. Squeezing her eyes shut, Mary stuck her head under the showerhead once again and let the water rinse it out. Now that she had washed her hair, she was done with her shower. Mary reached out and turned the knobs that shut off the water. She pushed aside the curtain and stepped out onto a towel she had laid on the floor. He towel was hanging on the rack as she placed it. Mary snatched the towel and dried herself off. Wiping and rubbing every part of her to dry her body. She leaned over the tub and wrung her long black hair out as best she could. "Where's the hell's that blow dryer?" she whispered to herself as she searched though the cluttered little closet in the bathroom. There were clean towels on a higher shelf but that was all oraganized and orderly. The lower shelf was where the chaos was. Mary continued to fumbled around countless other personal hygiene products until finally it showed itself. "There you are, you little crap b*****d!" insulted Mary. She plugged it in the outlet which happened to be up near the sink and grabbed her trusty comb. Mary procceed to dry and comb her hair. After she finished that, she secured her towel around herself and left the bathroom.

ok thats it ppl tell me how that was. not enough detail? too much? (though i doubt it) anything else wrong? tell me! comments no pms unless i say otherwise to you. thanks guys dyron out. ninja ninja