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a random bunch of crap that usually random and meaningless
i feel like writing poetry
this is one i wrote long time ago, well not so long but awhile.
its lame and boring but still....

gray rain
rain drops fall down,
gray sky, gray town,
gray me, gray you,
whole worlds gray too.
no love, no hate,
we say thats great.
no one is mean.
not that are seen.
no one feels bad,
no one is sad.

rain still falls down,
on this still town.
some one wakes up.
pours out a cup
of something sweet.
and starts to eat.
something is wrong,
awake and strong.
her brains not weak,
thinking all week.

rain coming down
on this gray town.
they're like sheep,
the people asleep.
comes up with plan.
to see if she can
make it alright
turns up the light.
and looks around.
listens for sound

rain falling down
to wake this town.


comment, tell me if its any good.






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Kano_Akita
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commentCommented on: Mon Apr 30, 2007 @ 02:56pm
shiny!!! i really love your poetry. are you gonna turn in your notebook of it for extra credit?


commentCommented on: Tue May 01, 2007 @ 05:22am
not the notebook, but i'll type some of it up. i really dont think its that good though.



filia maris
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Kano_Akita
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commentCommented on: Tue May 01, 2007 @ 02:35pm
i do!


commentCommented on: Wed May 02, 2007 @ 05:16am
really? you mean it? heart thanx i feel good now. even if you are just saying it.



filia maris
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Kaiser Lemach
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commentCommented on: Wed May 02, 2007 @ 07:19am
Yo listen up here's a story
About a little guy that lives in a blue world
And all day and all night and everything he sees
Is just blue like him inside and outside
Blue his house with a blue little window
And a blue corvette
And everything is blue for him and his self
And everybody around
'Cause he ain't got nobody to listen..

I have a blue house with a blue window
Blue is the color of all that I wear
Blue are the streets and all the trees are too
I have a girlfriend and she is so blue
Blue are the people here that walk around
Blue like my corvette, it's standing outside
Blue are the words I say and what I think
Blue are the feelings that live inside me

i love this song. and about poetry, my poet phase was pre blanchet. no masterpieces are known to remain. and my art phase is gone to. the dragons, the warships, the warriors.

all my colors fade away, all my colors fade to gray.


commentCommented on: Thu May 03, 2007 @ 11:48pm
now i feel sad. but my stuff is still crap.



filia maris
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Kaiser Lemach
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commentCommented on: Fri May 04, 2007 @ 02:11am
not necessarily. and i dont think anyone reads mine anymore.

and that song was awesome but it was also a suicide note.

full lyrics:
I'm blue, da ba dee da ba die (x7)(x2)

I have a blue house with a blue window.
Blue is the color of all that I wear.
Blue are the streets and all the trees are too.
I have a girlfriend and she is so blue.
Blue are the people here that walk around,
Blue like my Corvette, it's standing outside.
Blue are the words I say and what I think.
Blue are the feelings that live inside me.

I'm blue, da ba dee da ba die (x7)(x2)

I have a blue house with a blue window.
Blue is the color of all that I wear.
Blue are the streets and all the trees are too.
I have a girlfriend and she is so blue.
Blue are the people here that walk around,
Blue like my Corvette, it's standing outside.
Blue are the words I say and what I think.
Blue are the feelings that live inside me.

I'm blue, da ba dee da ba die
If I were green I would die
If I were green I would die
If I were green I would die
If I were green I would die
If I were green I would die(x2)


commentCommented on: Fri May 11, 2007 @ 02:14am
i like that, its sounds familiar. but my stuff still crap.



filia maris
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