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Emma Kidnapped
It was a fresh spring day. Flowers were abloom everywhere. It was Jewelalia's crowning day.Princess Emeralda (Emma) walked through the garden gazing at ruby centered cherry blossoms.
"Hey Emma, what 'cha doing?"
The princess whirled around, her creamy brown curls slapping her cheek. Her bright green eyes rested on a flying blue bunny.
"Oh, it's you Rayla."
Rayla was a blue buntureau Emma and her sisters found. Emma got to keep it and now she and all her sisters had pets.
"I thought you were Kiki. She always pulls at my hair. I don't want to look ugly for tonight's ceremony.
"Oh! I was just checking on you!", piped Rayla.
"Aee, thanks. How's Mayrine?"
Mayrine was the sister's snow white roxantrine pony.
"She's fine."
"Wanna walk?"
"Sure!"
As Emma walked through the amythest violets with Rayla, a dark figure loomed ahead.
"Huh, what's that shadow?"
Emma looked up.
"Aaarrrggghhh!"
A giant griffin scooped up Emma and Rayla onto it's back.
Up in the air, Emma couldn't speak. All she could manage was a whisper.
" Ivy(Iris), Roxy(Roxanne), Phira(Sapphira), Demi(Demetra), help me.", she breathed as the griffin carried her through the clouds. Then, she fainted clutching Rayla near her heart.






User Comments: [4]
pooh_spida79
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Fri Nov 07, 2008 @ 12:11am


nice! maybe you should change *ugly* to something like unpresentable. and wat's a buntureau?


SunnyChicGirl
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Sun Nov 23, 2008 @ 02:13pm


omg! i can just imagine the setting! pirate


Merriara
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Sat Jan 10, 2009 @ 06:06pm


oooh, I like this one even better than the previous one! but do you really need "amethyst violets"? that's pretty much repeating itself. maybe "fragrant violets" would be better? ((I take back my comment on what she should look like--I read your journals backwards @_@))


Katara daughter of Water
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Sun Jan 11, 2009 @ 09:49am


Sometimes you leave out explanations of things we don't necessarily know about. For example a buntureau and roxantrine. I have no idea what those are. If they refer to jewels then that is just my ignorance in that regard. When it refers to sister in "Mayrine was the sister's snow white roxantrine pony" that refers to Emma right? If so you should put her name there instead. Also it is not necessary to put in parenthesis the full names of the sisters in the quote. You could easily put "All she could manage as the griffin carried her away was a whispered plea to her sisters for help before she fainted, clutching Rayla near her heart."


User Comments: [4]
 
 
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