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A teenage writer! Or at least a wanna be anyways.
The truth is I want to be a writer! I love writing, and I am somehow very good at is. Wierd isn't it, well it is for me. But I'll be glad to write something. Only one warning, it can, and will, take a while.
Story!
The rain was falling. I knew something was up, it never rains here without clouds. I then grew a sicking feeling in the pit of my stomach. I couldn't ingore it, or simple shake it off. My feet took off leaving my friends behind. I was out with them partying and give our luck to another friend's engament. I could hear them calling out to me, but I ingored it. I quickly reached an alley way where I saw a figure laying there.

I walked closer only to see her. Cold, lifeless, clothes stained with blood. Her blonde hair that was white when it snowed was fanned out. Her blue eyes were closed hiding them forever, and her face looked peaceful. I knew why it was raining. God was morning over the lost of an angel. I fell to my knees as tears forced the way out from my brown eyes. She was the one girl that ever cared for everyone. Her eyes always glowed with happiness, and her smile always tells you everything was going to be alright.

I felt numb, how can anyone do this to a fifthteen year old girl? How can they kill a girl that would give people things that they need or didn't need? What did she do to deserve this. I don't think it was revenge. I stopped fighting. I promised my little sister, who I am staring at her body, that I would protect her. I couldn't reach for my cellphone to call the cops, I couldn't scream or yell, I couldnt do anything but cry.

Footstep came slashing soon behind me. Then a gasp of horror. I believed every in this world some how knew that a young and innocent angel had lost their life. My friends couldn't move either. All I heard them say is, "Why her? Why her?" Everyone that knew her would be affected grately, but I know God is weeping more than any of us. She was taken before her time, Hope was taken before her time.






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commentCommented on: Sun Aug 05, 2007 @ 10:16pm
you can pass as a writer nice story but not really my thing you need to make a good war story lol or not


commentCommented on: Sun Aug 05, 2007 @ 11:27pm
Thanks!!!!!



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Neko_Ichihara
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commentCommented on: Tue Aug 07, 2007 @ 10:35pm
Yeah for brown eyes!!! smile , hardly anyone uses brown eyes anymore. I love your story but its really sad....really sad. Must write more soon, otherwise you don't get any of my writing anymore either.


commentCommented on: Fri Aug 10, 2007 @ 10:27pm
More of what?? That's the end of that.



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