- this was inspired by suicides and such.
- by AlKedeshDerech |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 06/20/2011 |
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- Title: Hope
- Artist: AlKedeshDerech
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Description:
Is there hope for us
Is there a chance
For i know everyday i live
a girl
out of misery and grief
ends her life
Is there hope
tears falling
is there a chance
can we rise again
this is a prayer for humanity
i plead god to help us
wars start
bodys fall
is there hope
is there hope
- Date: 06/20/2011
- Tags: hope suicide help tears hopelessness
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Comments (2 Comments)
- Pure_Celestial_Snow - 06/23/2011
- i like this poem a lot its inspirational
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- Reneaphalias - 06/21/2011
- Ok, so this one is pretty cool... I like the concept, it just needs a bit of fine tuning. #1. Please use correct capitalization and punctuation. It is very hard to rate poems high if you are not spelling things correctly, and also if you're not using punctuation at all. #2. the line: for I know everyday I live, and then says a girl, I would tie those two lines together better. I had to read it three times for it to make sense. #3. Put question marks after "Is there a chance".
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