Reality or a Daydream?

• Artist: GirlyGirl65821
• Description: I felt like submitting something off the top of my head because normally I can make some pretty good work doing that. I thought I'd write this about the love of my life as well, so there's some point to it. Comment and rate please! I'd appreciate it if the comments weren't too harsh, but even bad comments are sometimes uplifting. ^_^
• Date: 06/17/2011
• Tags: reality daydream love romance truth

I walk, today, down the path of life,
Trying to avoid hearbreak and strife.
As I walk, my mind wonders to a distant land
Where a silent war is at hand.

I see a figure moving near
Saying words I love to hear;
A peaceful escape from the deafening silence
Away from death and meaningless violence.

As the figure draws nearer my heart races
Longing to feel his sweet embraces,
His lips touch mine and the war melts away,
Turning the darkness into day.

I open my eyes and see nothing,
But I feel like I've just felt something;
Stronger than just a newborn love
Something sent from up above.

Was it a mere daydream my heart hopes to hold?
Or was it reality, vivid and bold?
My heart longs to see the truth behind lies,
But I fear I won't see truth through love's blind eyes.

Some day soon truth will be revealed,
But for now later days are locked and sealed,
Under constant watch by the only one who knows
Only a small bit of what is to come shimmers and glows.

Comments

[GirlyGirl65821]

Thanks. ^_^ I'll try to. biggrin

[x_LiveFantasy_x]

Loved it! smile keep up the good writing!

[GirlyGirl65821]

Thanks so much. ^_^ I try to make it work right, but sometimes it hard to find words that work out with the other. You have to be quick to find a word that'll fit. XD Otherwise it just doesn't turn out the way it should. smile

[Robotic Purple]

its ok i make alot of thoughs kind of mistakes in my writing to. if i could i would rate this 99999 stars but the option in unaveilable. its rare that you find a poem with meaning, power, ryme, ebbs and flows that click together to make a poem made of clockwork. Brillante, vera poesia nella sua maggior parte devine forma.

[GirlyGirl65821]

By the way, on the first paragraph on the second line, it's supposed to be heartbreak, but my finger missed the key and it came out as hearbreak. Sorry. ^_^