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Too many words
So don't tell them that Santa's not real,
Don't tell her that they're split apart.
Don't tell him that she'll never love him,
Don't tell her she'll never live up.
Don't say that her chances are over
and don't mention that money's been spent.
Don't tell him his future is missing and
that dad left the family a mess.
Don't break for an instant this bubble let kids be just kids for just once.
You can tell them that life isn't rainbows, But don't tell them that they'll be like us.
Comments (6 Comments)
- viper_353 - 01/22/2011
- I was thinking like "don't let her know that she's never going to live up to their expectations...." that kind of thing! Hmm I guess it might not be that clear!! Awwe, thanks so much!! I changed the wording on the second last line a couple times and in the end I wanted to keep with the rhyme scheme....But I'm still not thinking it fits right. sad
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- Stormgem - 01/22/2011
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Again - brilliant! Especially the last phrase. 'But don't tell them that they'll be like us.' very sharp! Love it.
Something here I don't understand is the forth line .... 'Don't tell her she'll never live up.' it may just be me being an ignorant fool, but to me this makes little sense..... - Report As Spam
- viper_353 - 01/21/2011
- awwe thankyou so much!! smile
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- Tolora - 01/21/2011
- i love this!!!~ <3
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- viper_353 - 01/21/2011
- do you mean the poem or the title? The title was just because I had to put something on it! I don't know what I'd call it for real. And the poem's about the innocence of childhood and not wanting to subject kids to the same thing as all of us have been through. Even though it will happen anyway. Does that make sense??
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- ilene-lover - 01/21/2011
- what too many words is about?
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