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I think it's sad that poetry -
Supposed to be the most thee -
Has been defiled and desecrated.
The practice goes on, un-debated...
We do this art a great, hate-wrong
We write in prose, yet call it song.
Assonance, alliteration -
Left to time's obliteration -
We do not use reiteration.
Our lines are sentences cut short.
Paragraphs called stanzas?! Thwart
This evil practice. Make it good
Once more before it's lost in wood
And wilderness that knows no bounds.
We must keep track - like sharp bloodhounds -
Of this dear trade we call our own,
But act as if we've never known -
As if poetry we've outgrown.
- by Hanzo Shinshiro |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 01/19/2011 |
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- Hanzo Shinshiro - 01/30/2011
- Understandable. I guess I was concentrating a little hard on the beauty of the language and not enough on the substance thereof.
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- vardofive - 01/29/2011
- Poetry is about capturing a moment. There doesn't have to be rhymes or meter or anything like that. i think that good poets do have a grasp of their poetic roots. You obviously can see the worth of classic poetry but there is a time and a place for modernity in your writing. Using "doth" and "thee" and words like that means you're trying too hard as far as i'm concerned. i like what you're saying here though. i agree that a lot of people calling themselves writers or poets are not.
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- Hanzo Shinshiro - 01/21/2011
- Gaia definitely needs a "Like" button for the comments. Thanks for the good vibes, though. ;P
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- viper_353 - 01/21/2011
- ehh....I like more more modern poetry. I think less is accomplished with defined rhyme schemes and such things than is with just a poetic feel. But whatever, differing opinions! Yours was actually really impressive!!
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