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"Sitting here, my knees damp and cold from snow. Gray, dark gray, stretches before me as a cold, solid, indisputable hunk of unforgiving rock. I cannot believe, as these beautiful fluffs of delicate white are falling, that you are not here to see it.
My mind, for now is as numb as my knees, fingers and toes. Red petals, soft and mutable in the snow, dance on the wind across the stone. I brought you your favorite flowers; only, you aren't here to see them.
I can't, I won't, I don't want to imagine a world without you in it! A wave of sorrow, as realization crashes over me, shattering what is left of my heart, my mind and my soul still further. The pain in my chest is burrowing still deeper, as I clutch at what I am sure is a gaping hole in my chest where my heart should be. An organ, I've been missing for some time. Since the time I gave it away to you, and now, with you gone, it’s missing too, leaving a hot, bleeding hole in my flesh, that, will hopefully heal with time. I don't know, some people never recover from a wound such as this.
So, as small drips of blue fall on to your unmoving stone, this is all I can do. For the rest of my body cannot function without its heart. Body contorted in pain as the petals continue to dance away from me, I remember all those sweet words whispered, kisses sharing passion, and this only tortures me further.
Curled on my side in the snow cradling the flowers you once loved as gently as you used to cradle me. My eyes drift shut, and all I can dream is love."
- by green_angel_1 |
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- | Submitted on 10/11/2010 |
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- Title: Unforgiving Stone
- Artist: green_angel_1
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Description:
I'd rather not give to much of a descriptive because I want to leave my piece open to your interpretation, and I want you to be able to experience it how you will.
The basic idea of the poem is dealing with loss, and the pain that is felt when someone you love dearly is gone.
I'd love any constructive criticism, and please please please comment!
- Date: 10/11/2010
- Tags: unforgiving stone loss pain sadness
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Comments (5 Comments)
- green_angel_1 - 10/12/2010
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Blue- Thank you dear ^_^
Maggs- My lovely daughter! biggrin Why thank you, and thank you for posting your feelings and response to it. smile I'm glad I could evoke that emotion from you (even though its sad D smile - Report As Spam
- maggs78 - 10/12/2010
- This poem makes me think about what life would be like without some of my friends. Death itself is something I think about a lot, and this poem reminds me of some of my feelings I tend to try to burry. Not only this, but it reminds me of how lucky I am to have friends that I care that much for, like you!
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- o Blue Dragon o - 10/12/2010
- nice o.o
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- green_angel_1 - 10/11/2010
- Thank you Stalker smile Maybe I'll give that a try sometime ^_^ and thanks so much for the vote!! biggrin
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- Schrodingers Kavat - 10/11/2010
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You've definitely improved :3
Personally, I love rhymes, so I'd love to see that sometime. : D 5'd - Report As Spam