Taken by the Reaper

• Artist: CerisiaWolfBlade
• Description: i haven't posted a poem in a while hope you like it^^
• Date: 01/10/2010
• Tags: reaper

your disillisioned and alone scarred for eternity
you look at me with sorrow in your eyes but i can't help you

because the reaper has taken me away away from you
the reaper looks with nothing but evil and take's my soul

to get me me back steal his key and plunge it into my soul and i will be reborn
the reaper will crumble and i'll be free

i'm free and now we can fall into love again

Comments

[Smitten14]

I thought it was really deep.As a poet you really went there and I respect the fact that your not afraid to explore the dark side.But,as the guy below me said,I think your rymeing and wording could have flowed a little better.But,other then that,its great! smile )))

[critic-the-homeless]

I love the moral of hte story. YOu did a great job with the imaginsation in it. But for it to flow more easily, in this kind of poem, you should rhyme a little bit more. It was very god, just needs a better choice of words at the ende of lines.
GREAT JOB ^.^ 4/5