The Feeling of Death

• Artist: luvd_n_forgotten
• Description: You better run. Its coming for you. Lol! Heres my lover, my poetry- The Feeling of Death.
• Date: 08/25/2009
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Can you stop the feeling?
Rushing threw your viens
Quickening your pulse
Stopping your heart
It pays a toll on you
For its a five letter word known to all
Feared to all as well
Your body tenses
Freezing your thoughts
Transforming your vision
Murdering your senses
Thats when your survival instincts come into play
You run
Scream
Cry
Nothing helps
Your fear leaves
As do you instincts
For death is waiting

Comments

[UC Poika]

I love it... the poem... and to be honest I am looking forward to the end...Excellent poem that flowed very well I thought.

[bassmaster_awesome]

It is good but is broken and hard to read, in the sense tht some parts don't make total sense. Now, i do accept an essence of this in poetry, because if confusion and/or madness is the emotion or mind set being drawn on, the better the writting, the more disjointed and peterbed the piece will come across. I hope you take what i say to good use. wink