Inside Reflection

• Artist: 4ever_lost in_ ur eyes
• Description: This is a poem i wrote about how some people hide their feelings with a simple smile. I know its not the best, but please comment and rate. Im looking for honest feedback. Thankyou!
• Date: 07/07/2009
• Tags: inside reflection

I look into the mirror
and what do I see
Somebody who resembles me
She is different
she is sad inside
and that sadness she tries to hide.
The smile she wears upon her face is just a fascade
and one of these days shes going to fade
No one is there to show her the right way
or have something sweet to say
She is alone,
no one to even call on the phone
She lives on day, by day
always headed down the wrong way
Maybe someone will come to help her
maybe someone will show her
all the love and kindness she could bare
But they better hurry
for her life is getting ready to scurry.

Comments

[Jarmis]

Yeah, it's not the best. But that doesn't mean it's not any good. I think it's a good idea and some of the lines are kinda cool.

I hope that none of that is about you... That would be sad.

3.5/5 but since that's impossible it gets 4/5 smile