dragonfly

• Artist: ibyjiby
• Description:
• Date: 06/05/2009
• Tags: dragonfly

i am a gentle dragonfly

going threw a never ending cycle

first i hatched

and then i grew

now just like my mother

who i never knew

i will lay my egg and fly away

i dont have much time to live

goodbye my delicate egg

just like me you will go threw this cycle

i will fly away and slowly fall to the ground

goodbye i cry

as i slowely die

as i slowely die...goodbye crying

Comments

[Drunken Aunt Coral]

Hmm. Well this one has some spelling errors but nothing major. I really like it so far. Capitolize the beginning of each line. Also capitolize all your I's. It shows the delicacy of life and death and how all good things can come to an end. How abandonment can hurt us all. I feel like most any one can relate to it. It also can symbolize many different things which is what a good peom should do. 5/5

[Zenyei]

sadness crying
ur writing speaks to me :')

[DoubleMintTwins18]

aww. I agree with Princess dawn orbian. It is soft and graceful. It is full of life. Good job. 5/5 from me. Please comment mine. ~xox~

[xXxEmmeryxXx]

its interesting but y shal we all die???

3/5

~emily

[princess dawn orbian]

id say its pretty good since poems r usually "soft & graceful" good job

[ibyjiby]

i realized it rymes in some parts, i didnt try to make it ryme