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Laundry
its the stuff i do everyday
i really wish it would go away
i put it in my room cuz thats where it goes
and yes my mom knows
as i seperate out the blacks and blues
suprise suprise this is really the new news
i found my hat i havent worn in ages
and it looks like its been wore by many sages
i found my all my colorful tie-dyes
and suprised that they werent surrunded by a bunch of flys
i was suprised that i use to be such a hippie
and i think thats rather niffty
now that i think about it
theres no were really to sit
so i guess ill donate some shirts
but no cuz whoever has one would rather roll in dirt
I wanna go play Guitar hero
but thats most like up for zero
so i better go do a load
befor my mom explodes
- by XXyour_only_demon_girlXX |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 06/04/2009 |
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- Title: Laundry
- Artist: XXyour_only_demon_girlXX
- Description: i made this up off the top of my head why doing chores so please enjoy and remember this poem when you do the next load of laundry okay people
- Date: 06/04/2009
- Tags: laundry
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Comments (6 Comments)
- AllHailRai - 02/06/2010
- and its all true rite e [i am her sis so HAHAHAHA]
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- XXyour_only_demon_girlXX - 09/10/2009
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MY RYMES ARE COOL THO.
but okay. This is just a style of writting I do I like to mix things up a bit like make it rhyme most of the time and sometimes not but im better at rhymeing than I am At most things (unless you count sports and being a smart@$$ as qualitys then Im good at those to) - Report As Spam
- Deathcake J - 09/09/2009
- It's clever and cute, but the meter isn't consistent when it should be. The first stanza read almost like a limerick, which would've been totally appropriate given the subject matter. If you're going to write in rhyming couplets, you should consider using a traditional meter. Shakespeare wrote almost exclusively in iambic pentameter, which is a great place for starting poets to work from. Conversely, if you want to be free of meter, consider not using rhyme at all!
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- joshleal - 09/08/2009
- totally lol'ing right now 5/5!
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- Meli Milk - 06/05/2009
- Lol clever poem
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- Lil Floof - 06/04/2009
- This is really funny. I love it. 5/5
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