Darkness...

• Artist: master1master1master
• Description: Im a poet and im 14 and am trying to find a life-style that revolves around this beautiful talent. If anyone can help me by telling me if I can make a living off of this i would really appreciate it. And this is a free form poem.
• Date: 05/28/2009
• Tags: darkness betrays shadows master1221

Darkness...
So vile and corrupt,
As my soul blackens,
And decays,
All i see is blood coming down...
Down from your face,
As the clock stops,
And time stops,
The world goes black,
Just because,
I hurt you,

Comments

[Goddess of Night Eternal]

All i can really think of to make a living off this, is to turn your poems into songs (cuz thats basically what a song is; a poem with some guitar and drums etc in the background, and it can help express ther poem further) or publishing a book of poems. hope that's helpful =3

[Goddess of Night Eternal]

I turned fifteen recently, and i've got kind of the same idea as you. maybe you can check out some of my writing. I love your poem, its simple yet striking, and can touch people gently yet so profoundly. keep writing, its amazing!

[Vampire Tala Rosabella]

play with words munplate them until they do wut u want that is wut poetry is it is like harnessing power and using it and don't be afaride 2 show emotion that is wut poetry is all about keep practicing

[roxykat7]

I feel the emotion in the poem..Great job!!

[Cookies-N-Scream]

There doesn't seem to be any deeper meaning behind what you've presented. Poetry is about connotations, similies, metaphors. Far more than the straight forward meaning of words.
You need to deepen your use of language to portray an idea, give a hidden background to why, how you hurt this person.
You need to practice.