Love Poems V

• Artist: Cottoncandyocbra3
• Description:
• Date: 04/16/2009
• Tags: love poems

Merry-go-round twist you down, unto the earth for reprieve

Withholding desert angels billed for to never deceive

Shelter from erupting skies that would burn down our paradise

This protective shell is me, and it hears your cries

But the holy land is in this comprehending grasp

Devoid of fear never to dissolve our clasp

Rationing isn't amongst the worry stones that burden

No choking weight to strangle us, no poisoning warden

So let my dust clouds sprinkle amnesty in your wake

This gilded chain of love I'll never break

Comments

[Casca 7]

Much better than VI especially with the imagery. It seems you've gotten over your distaste for flowy rhyme? ^_^ It has something most of your other poems don't. Amidst the pain and tears most of yours have, this one has hope which is a good step toward the maturity of your poems. ^_^

[Faerie]

OwO
I like this poem a lot!!!!!!

[whitejade13]

For once, it's not the last line that's my favorite. It's the second to last. LOVE. IT.

[dreamerlove8]

I think this is my favorite.