Feelings

• Artist: XxDarkxKillerxX
• Description: umm well lets just say this is what i feel when something bad happens to me
  comments ....good/bad
• Date: 03/18/2009
• Tags: feelings

Why bother to love
When it always turns to hate
Why bother to live
When it always turns to death

These silent tears that I cry
Are never heard
Why should I bother to shed another tear
These little things I do
Never make a difference
Why should I bother trying to do them

This little voice in my head
It tell me to die
This little part of my heart
Tells me to let out and cry
What should I do?
Are there anymore options?

No I just want someone to kiss my tears away
To hold me in their arms
I cannot find that person
My only friends are the stars and voices in my head

The cold night sky you see is my heart
Every star you see
Is how many I’m going to get hurt
Can you count all those little stars?
Can you count how many times I’m going to get hurt?
No
Because there are too many

I just lay on my bed
Waiting to drift off to sleep
So I don’t have to deal with the dreadful pain anymore
So I can dream of what will never be

I want to close my eyes
Just dream and dream
And never wake up
To this continuous nightmare

I want to wish this were all a dream
All just one horrible dream
One that I can wake up from
Once I would wake up I could get back to my happy life
But of course I have no happy life
Its all tears and sadness these days
Why should I continue this life
When I feel almost nothing that I enjoy
Its just so much anger so much pain
I would rather feel nothing
Than pain at all
wouldn’t you agree?

Comments

[popsicle]

Sounds like your typical teenage angst poem. I honestly couldnt even finish it for that reason. Add some structure to it perhaps, and try playing with the various tools of language to add some overall finesse so that it stands out from the vast sea of this type of poem. Read it again to catch the various little grammar flaws as well. It's a good start, but just look for ways to make it more sophisticated and unique.