My prison

• Artist: xLiesxOfxThexMirrorx
• Description: It is what it is.
  Mostly, it's about my feelings about my body and it being wrong.
• Date: 02/09/2009
• Tags: depressing transsexual anger prison hate

These walls if flesh,
These bars of bone,
I call out I'm distress,
to heroes unknown.

I beat, I bang, I scream and cry,
And nobody seem to hear,
But even if they did ask, 'why?'
I couldn't say because of fear.

Comments

[xx-teardrop-dragon-xx]

I like all of it apart from the last 2 lines.
But Overall Pretty Cool
4/5

[gearjammer25]

But even if they did ask, 'why?' has to many syllable in it, but other than that I really liked it

[peramene]

On a personal note: I'm so sorry. Don't be afraid. I know it's hard, and I know there are more of them and they're stronger than you. Blow them away. Make them get out of your way. You are who you are. Don't let anyone - anyone, god damn it - take that from you.

[peramene]

As for your writing, your message is unclear, and the story is incomplete. You should return to this piece. Who are these unknown heroes, why do you call to them? How can the villains ask if they don't hear? Why are you afraid of them? There are also some spelling mistakes, 'if', 'I'm' and 'seem' were by context clearly meant to be 'of', 'in', and 'seems.' Keep writing.

[xLiesxOfxThexMirrorx]

I see what ymean there.

[NakedJack]

A poem about the inability to cope with who you are or what has happen to you. I feel the same way but not what is happening to me, but society as a whole.