The Poem Without A Title

• Artist: Torenhime
• Description: Just a poem I wrote. I thought it would be nice. It's kinda cheesy though.
• Date: 01/25/2009
• Tags: poem without title

Why is night like night?
And day like day?
Why do these blue skies ever turn gray?

Are we always to be like this?
Strangers?
In an unforgiving palace?

Lovers of hate?
Hatred of love?

When will these two hearts meet?
Shall they ever?

Be they ever in tune?
Or forever off key?

The answer to this is simple;
Tell the person you love them,
Or watch them for ever with another.

Comments

[Torenhime]

Thanks guys! I will defiantly try to keep writing!

[290DarkStars]

i like it! its got a rythem to it... hay screw fridge and frisky! what poetry is is rythem and passion! nothing else! keep writing my friend! You definatly have a future ahead of ya!

[xXsecret_artistXx]

i loved the poem. it sounds like it actually came from your heart.

[-x- Fridge -x-]

I don't particularly like the format. Some stanzas have two lines and some stanzas have three lines. That threw me off when I read it. Also, you don't have to use question marks, we understand that you are asking a question.
I agree with Frisky Shadow. Although, there are a few good things. Better luck next time. 2/5

[7Eureka7]

(cont)...ling me what you think.

[7Eureka7]

Screw Frisky there V...poetry comes from whatever your heart tells you at the time. It needn't be what someone expects or even have a rhyme. Also to tell someone you love them is brave not stupid. Although they might not love you back you would regret not telling them and never finding out their feelings. Don't let illiterate fools tell you you're writing sucks. Screw them all! Black Diamond Fox and The Real Vendetta are my accounts with some poetry if you'd be interested in reading them and tel

[Frisky Shadow]

Absolute suck. Your poem needs a title first, and you don't put a reference image in writing. And you can't say:
"The answer to this is simple;
Tell the person you love them,
Or watch them for ever with another." Because your giving the reader advice, which isn't poetry. And on top of that, it's very bad advice because the peron you say "I love you" to won't always love you back. 1/5 Learn to write.