REVERIE...

• Artist: DeDrim
• Description: i'm not good at this...i'm not a poet..
  but i just want to be expressive to my feelings....so
  just comment...either negative or positive ...thnx...>.<
• Date: 01/09/2009
• Tags: reverie

I always dream of something...
something that satisfies my HEART
something which expresses my feelings
something that relieve my hurt
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I always dream of anything...
anything which comes on my mind
anything of my whole being
anything that in verities,I can't find
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Eventhough,it's inside of my brain
which may be forgotten.sooner or later
It will never be a vain
cause it's in my HEART,w/c never disappear
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Some may think it's idle
but i never thought of that
cause it makes me feel not DISABLE...
ABLE of doing what
I genuinely want

Comments

[DeDrim]

....tnx ..i shall work hard and try my best to be good at it........

[011shadow110]

its not that bad

[DeDrim]

ok......tnx for that...thou it hurts..huhuhhu..i'll take it as an advice....

[Xialliest]

Ok sense you said your not good and not a poet I wont be harsh, because you don't know what your doing. But just so you know your rhyme scheme you tried to make is really bad, to be blunt. And the words you use don't really go together to well. Sorry but 1/5