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I have a wall u cannot see-
Because its deep inside of me-
It blackens my heart on every side-
And it helps emotions there to hide-
U can't reach in-
I can't reach out-
U wonder what it's all about...
Each time my tender heart was hurt-
The scars within grew worse and worse-
So stone by stone I've built a wall-
Thats now so thick it cannot fall...
PLEASE UNDERSTAND THAT IT'S NOT YOU...!
Please help me try to break through...!
I want so bad to show myself...
And LOVE from u would really help...
So brick by brick chip at my wall...
Thats now so thick it cannot fall...
I've tried so hard to build the perfect wall-
But there are still a few small flaws-
Which is the KEY to breaking through this innner wall tomb...
So would u please search for a crack?
And knock each stone off it's stack?
My eyes are swelling up with tears-
Thinking of my childhood fears-
So please my friend-
BREAK down my wall-
Though, through my errors it begins to fall...
THE END...
- by Xx Aoi-Neko xX |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 01/06/2009 |
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- Title: My wall...
- Artist: Xx Aoi-Neko xX
- Description: This is my first peom....i'm not that good at poetry...sorry! ^^:
- Date: 01/06/2009
- Tags: wall
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Comments (2 Comments)
- holdingontodreams - 01/10/2009
- don't be sorry its really good!!
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- Gaaras_lady_eva - 01/06/2009
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its really good!
but to give you some...uh....constructive critisizum (sp?)
the next poem you write, maybe try not rhyming?
i have found that if you just let the words flow onto the paper or W.Word it comes out better then trying to rhyme. but if rhyming comes easily to you please continue writing!
your good! *thunbms up* 5/5 - Report As Spam