gone

• Artist: Gone4ever23
• Description:
• Date: 12/24/2008
• Tags: gone depression alone

I sit alone,
away from the crowd,
away from everybody,
where it is quite,
no longer loud,
I stare up into the endless black sky,
unaware that you are sitting by my side,
you always where,
but i never knew,
for one brief moment,
i looked over at you,
you smiled then vanished,
gone forever.

Comments

[FisaLisaRose]

This is very mysterious!

[Reixvavn]

Hm. You have something... but not quite. Perhaps remove the pronouns, or most of them, and re-arrange some of your lines...