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• Artist: intoxicatingDestruction
• Description: this is a poem I wrote today to show how my friends have felt in my perspective during and after relationships. I happily have not had to endure things so terrible. Enjoy if you can.
• Date: 12/22/2008
• Tags: love emotions story perspectives

It starts with the words
"I'll love you forever"
It continues to say,
"I will be with you for always"
In every one of these stories things are said
"I will for you"
Even the most stricken know deep down
"I will return for nothing"
As we cry over this we realize we knew
"You have been here for never"
It hits us coldly and suddenly
"I will always remember you for....no"

Comments

[intoxicatingDestruction]

I'm glad someone final commented. I feel so hated, as if I offend people when there are no comments.......

[final scene]

it's sad but true

[intoxicatingDestruction]

thank you very much
i try for that too
I hope everyone understood it okay

[Hajirau Musubu no Wakagi]

I love the blatent truth about it, the format, and the diction. It's simple and easy. Not overcomplicated for people like me who are fairly dense.
Anyways, I love it.

[intoxicatingDestruction]

the pic is ,my siggy I just put it there for the lulz XD
I did no for a reason because after all that the girl had had it with the whole thing
thanx btw

[RainbowJimmy]

Okay, one. Wonderful format, keeps they eyes moving. Formatting is your friend. That's good.
Two, great use of quotations. (As examples, etc) They wrench the heart appropriately.
Three, yay for observation.
Four, I'm not sure I like how it ends. I mean... It just ends abruptly, and the "...no." kind of throws off the internal rhythm you had going.
Five, not a fan of the reference image. This is more socio-emotional than that pictures gives it any credit for.

Overall, bravo.

[intoxicatingDestruction]

Like I said it might be wrong of me to say these things because I have yet t receive it.