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There is a girl
Late at night
In the woods
She wanders
While wearing
A white hood
A shawl on
her back
A basket in hand
She is
Crying . . .
You ask "Why wail?"
She turns
The pure turns
To blood
She says
"My lover
took my heart
when he died'
Her chest was
a hole
She reaches
her stained hand
"Will you give me yours?"
- by Kamen_Singer |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 11/03/2008 |
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- Title: Heart of the Damned
- Artist: Kamen_Singer
- Description: I don't have much to except this was just for fun. I hope you enjoy
- Date: 11/03/2008
- Tags: heart damned
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Comments (2 Comments)
- screamyourlegoff - 11/03/2008
- Not bad but I have to agree with RedWhiteBlack
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- RedWhiteBlack - 11/03/2008
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I have a problem with you using the word "turns" twice in the fifth stanza. This could have been a really good poem if it had more of a rhythm to it and if it flowed better, because the imagery is really astounding.
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