*~A.S.H.L.E.E.~*

• Artist: Powered By Ryu 666
• Description: I made this poem as a last ditch effort for someone I love very much. Only thing is, this person seems to have lost faith in me, and we don't talk anymore. Now that the new arenas are up (beta only) then I figured "why not give my writing a shot" so I entered. I worked hard on this and am very proud of it. If you don't like it, tell me why. If you think it needs improvement, tell me where. If you like it, then tell me!! ^_^
• Date: 07/21/2008
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A selfish masochist
I want you all to myself
Forever loving you
Let me hear you scream my name

Strip the mask from your heart
You know you want me
A cage filled with dreams and desires
You will know Paradise

Heaven all to ourselves
Two loving Angels
Starry skies radiate down
Demons in a tangle of love

Love me as I love you
I'll give up anything and everything
Just to have you in my arms tonight
Someday I will make you mine

Even though we are now apart
You will forever be remembered
Please, never forget
This love I have for you

Every time I hear your voice
Feel your unkindly embrace
A sword runs through my heart
It kills me to know that you are not mine

I will love you forever
Please, love me
Save me

Comments

[Jolene023]

Remember: love must always live free!

[Lenore Affinity]

its so sad...

[Beautifully Broken Smile]

It's very interesting how you do seem a bit selfish and all knowing in the 1st three stanzas and then all of a sudden some what vunerable in the next. But overall its a great poem :]

[Broken_Soul_Torn_Mind]

Poetically, it is fantastic. But you seem a little full of yourself in it (like in the "you know you want me" part). I mean, if you really love this person, let them go. Isn't their happiness more important than anything else? 3/5