A poem about my feelings

• Artist: ProphecyWillow
• Description: I wrote this poem while I was at young life camp last week, I don't know that it's really all that good, but it was how I was feeling at the time. So anyways I just wanted to hear what the good people of gaia had to say about my work, so please post.
  
  ~thanks.
  Liz
• Date: 07/20/2008
• Tags: feelings

Do my feelings reach him,
Does he even know,
Could he look inside my heart,
To see what I can't show?

Can he see the hurt,
Will he see the pain,
Does he know of the hurt I feel,
The hurt of men who once knew my name?

Does he know that I fear trusting,
After all my men caused pain,
Can't he understand my feelings,
that there is nothing left to gain?

But still he makes me love him,
Forever I must hide,
Forever to afraid to speak to him,
Of the love I feel inside.

Comments

[wheelman123456]

i hope u dont have to write another but i like it 100/5

[inuhanyou441]

Nice work. Those are some powerful words you've got there. 5/5 hands down.

[prettypinkdragon]

I like this poem the structure and ryhming scheme are simple but show the complex feelings, good work

[ProphecyWillow]

I really hope that people like this poem ^.^