Perfect Grave

• Artist: FionaRoseDarkholme
• Description: This is an old poem about me and my boyfriend. The problems were so bad but we kept them to ourselves which leads to the hidden meaning of the grave.
• Date: 07/19/2008
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I've dug myself a Perfect Grave,
a place where I can lay;
close my eyes and waste away.
This is my "Perfect Grave"....
This so called "Perfect Grave", per say,
I made it for myself one day.
Now I lay and cry in pain,
inside this Perfect Grave.
I wish that I could make it fade,
a figment of the day.
But all along I try and say,
"Someone help me out today."
Please, I beg you night and day,
do not go away.
I'm stuck inside my "Perfect Grave",
and I am here to stay.
The perfect world outside my Grave,
it's all just black and gray.
So much pain I feel today,
I think I want to stay.
I made myself a "Perfect Grave",
to die and waste away.....

6/21/07

Comments

[Mario the Davidic Hero]

very good there, lad! 5/5

[UNKNOW dude ii]

i luv it its awESOMe!! with a capital ESOM 4 sum reason XP

[Zajas]

Very well done, and heart-felt at that. Also, the fact that you carried your rhyme pattern through the entire poem is phenomenal, let alone actually making it relevant throughout. All things considered, a great poem. 5/5

[[[Hikari-chan]]]

Nice, you managed to make it rhyme well without creating weird lines and using irrelevant words.

I'm not one for the negative-type poems but I think this was well done. :3

[supi_kun]

sweeet~!!
it's really nice, i like the rhyme, though it goes little funny in the middle

[BlazingXeir]

That is very nice. I like the meaning behind it as well. 4/5

[Broken_Soul_Torn_Mind]

Pretty good. 4/5!