Into the abyss

• Artist: Kitzsumi
• Description: Well i came up with this suddenly on the spot~! it is supposed to bedeep and meaningfull,
  yes i can spell a word wrong from time to time, but hey give me credit, i actually feel this way, that is if you get the meaning of the poem~!
• Date: 04/02/2010
• Tags: into abyss

I am shuddered in this dark place,
feeling alone and escaping no more,
No one sees just how much pain i am in,
Not knowing how to think,
I feel like i'm falling inot this empty abyss,
No one in sight,
nothing in my mind,
Just The emptyness that is my soul,
No one to take it,
No one to feel it,
I am alone,
Till times end,
I feel nothing,
I am nothing,
And no one can hear my cry's,
My cry's of help,
In this dark place,
So i just Keep falling with no end,
Until i heard someone calling,
Calling from beyond,
I looked above me,
To see That it was you,
You were yelling my name,
having an arm reached out,
Trying to grab me,
With no luck in catching me,
Falling apart from each other,
I scream aloud,
Your name,
It was all i thought as i fell,
Till i hit the bottom of this dark abyss,
I looked up to watch the tears fall,
Falling from your eye's,
I caught them and said,
"Even if it takes me forever,
I will find my way out of here,
Just so i can keep you safe,
In my arms,
So just wait,
I shall return..."

Comments

[Kitzsumi]

your mean tammy.... D:< but thanks for reading it~! ^_^

[durdeDurp]

Hey you just asked me to read it, ya never said that I had to give my opinion on it -_-

[Kitzsumi]

thanks~! ;3

[arsenic desires]

Hey Kitz! I really liked it!Awesome job gaia sis(;

[niarbyl]

I really liked it it was deep and meaningful. Just you had a few spelling errors... but i won't hold that against you.
One of the best =)
4//5

[Kitzsumi]

thank you tinz~! well i think this is whati get for comming up with it on the spot and stuff xD

[Tinzing]

Hey Kitz! I think its a good start often write poems like this so i would adise you to look at mine as well but i like yours 4/5 because there is always more to be done =]