siolders diery~ after war

• Artist: siiy-chan
• Description: evil, war, ashes
• Date: 05/22/2009
• Tags: aftermath

today our troop walked thruegh the small town that was attacked on the privius night.ashes burned and singed my feet. theey were still hot and soaked thruegh my warn boots. the smell of blood was thick and corpses lay still and cold.one of the servivers fell to her neas and wept uncantrolably and the others just stared at the grusom sight. the ashes fell like snow for three days and on the fourth, rose petals blue in the wind with the very smell of death.


soilders diery~

Comments

[lakelurk]

Ew ew ew grammar. D:

[sk8erboy61955]

Very good but try using better grammer biggrin but good

[Maybe Matches]

You should definitely work on your spelling. The errors are keeping me from taking the story very seriously.

[Naoto the Ace Defective]

Sounds interesting, but could you try and use better grammar?It was a little hard to read.