The Chronicle of Axys

• Artist: Guardioz
• Description: Just wrote it quickly. I have no idea if anyone will like this it's just a quick introduction to the character Axys (pronounced axis), who at the age of seventeen is one of the most hated among the teenagers of Xel (pronounced Zell).
• Date: 10/01/2010
• Tags: chronicle axys

As he walked through the alley, Axys, a boy of seventeen years, heard the scuffling feet of someone following him. He pays no attention to it, rather he keeps walking. Being followed is a common occurence for him, in the city of Xel.
Axys is a young man of average height and weight, leaner than most, and has short-cropped, spikey, red hair. What sets him apart are his eyes. One is emerald green and the other grey.He was often picked on because of is mismatched eyes. Most citizens of Xel have either blue or red eyes.
When Axys reaches the door to his older brother, Zare's house he is set upon by five thugs. Each is wielding either a lead pipe or the mugger's favorite tool, a short knife like weapon known as a Xel Crux. The blade of the Xel Crux is about five inches long and has a hooked tip and a finger guard.
Axys easily disarms each of the attackers and sends them running, thankful Zare didn't get involved. The people who picked on him, including the five thugs, did so out of contempt for Axys. That contempt slowly grew into hate, which quickly turned violent. Axys never fought unless forced to protect himself or one of his few friends. Axys, the gentle, the kind hearted, the strong. Axys, the savior of Xel!

Comments

[Hjersden]

Seems like an interesting enough introduction, though your writing is a little blunt for my taste. Try to watch your verb tenses more closely, as it can be rather distracting to some readers.

[Guardioz]

Comments welcome.