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Angeal woke up sweating and panting from his dream, or was it a dream. It seemed to live like to be a dream, he thought. For some reason Angeal thought he had been there before: no, he knew he had been there before. “Ahh I wish I could remember where I have seen this...” said Angeal. As Angeal looked around his prison cell, he knew he could add another day to his stay. He wished he could figure a way out from his **extended stay** (<--this word choice doesn't flow too well; try another?). Angeal remembered the day he was thrown in prison as clear as a bell. He had been helping the large rebel group try and over throw the government when they caught him at his house on the outskirts of town, smuggling the rebels in his basement. The rebels where hanged in the town square while he was dragged to prison. The last thing he remember about that day were the other rebels in the crowd, looking shocked at how Angeal had been caught.
Day after day Angeal was forced ("just"<--unnecessary word) to sit and figure a way out of his cell. On the first day of his fitfth week of him being in prison he would bang on the cell door until one of the jail guards came and took him to the warden, warden james priest. Now, warden priest was the toughest warden you would ever meet; nothing escaped his notice in the prison. Warden priest said he would offer me a deal, he said that he would allow me to go free if I told him where the rebels secret fortress was located. “warden I won’t lie to you even if I knew where they are located, I would not tell you”. I could see that the warden was trying to call my bluff. “ Then tell me why my boys found evedince that pointed not only you knowing the rebels location but you being one of the main personal from the group”. “Well then your guards must be lying to you I have never even heard of the base.”
angeal was now in solitary confinement this just great angeal thought know i can get out of here better. ok i want to take out the guards and be able to move without setting off the motion detectors.
- by thegreatsquallreal |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 08/23/2009 |
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- Title: the story
- Artist: thegreatsquallreal
- Description: this is a part from my book i will publish it soon as i can the notes are suggestions that have been given to me by people who have read my book
- Date: 08/23/2009
- Tags: story action angeal jail
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Comments (2 Comments)
- thegreatsquallreal - 03/03/2010
- yea this is the first book i am writing i acutally re wrote it once again so i might post it once agian
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- Prime Time Parade - 08/23/2009
- I wouldn't have minded hearing about his dream but other then that it was ok. 3/5 but I'm not sure why. The words seemed to get stuck, it didn't flow too well.
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