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Prologue
The sky is a darken void that runs endlessly. Still ocean masks the ground with its deep wine water. Not the slightest of ripples is made.
Where am I? A boy says in his mind.
He’s lying on his back, floating two feet above the vast ocean. He tries to move but fails.
What’s happening? How did I get here? I was just…just…
A lone snow flake caresses his cheek then fades to nothingness as it falls. This touch reminds the boy of a memory, of Christmas. His younger sister was making snow angels lying on her stomach instead of her back. She said that it was better that way because it would give her angel a face. Once inside the house, they would snuggle against their big, cream furred dog as they wait for their parents to pour them hot coco. Then, as they sang carol songs, the father would excuse himself from time to time to answer a phone call. He would go outside and come back in after a few minutes. But then, that day, he didn’t come back at all.
The boy’s memory suddenly turns into a burning inferno. Flames licked every surface of his house. He hears screaming and sees dark figures that he couldn’t recognize because of the thick smoke. Then his memory gets cut short.
“You…” a deep, hoarse voice echoes as it’s projected from nowhere.
The boy tries to say something but his lips wouldn’t move so he said it in his mind instead. What do you want?
“Your soul…” he—it—talked in slow motion. “Is mine”
The boy’s heart races as if it was about to jump out of his chest, literally. He feels it sliding out of his body but at the same time, still in place. But he doesn’t panic. He’s calm, as if he was dreaming. Maybe he was, he thought.
“You will lose all your memory…of when you were alive”
That’s when he realizes he was going to die but for some reason, it doesn’t faze him.
“Feel no pain…feel no happiness. You will have nothing…will go on with nothing. All you will do is listen and…obey”
The boy could feel the emptiness in his chest as the voice stole his soul. Then he starts to talk, his tone dull and emotionless. He tries to stop but his body doesn’t respond to him. “I give my life for you, divine, to rid my grief and sorrow. I shan’t feel to all. I shan’t feel me. For I have killed and sinned. My kin is gone forever in despair, for I have burnt their life to hell’s abyss”
- by MarukawaBubbleGum |
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- | Submitted on 07/31/2009 |
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- Title: Death Dwellers
- Artist: MarukawaBubbleGum
- Description: This is a prologue. I am seriously begging for someone to read this and comment me about it! Is it good or bad? Amazing or horrible? I need to know or else i'll go crazy! >_<
- Date: 07/31/2009
- Tags: death dwellers romance action adventure
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Comments (6 Comments)
- Aubreewyn - 08/11/2009
- this is really good
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- MarukawaBubbleGum - 08/01/2009
- it can? i dint know that sweatdrop
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- livelovelaugh2 - 08/01/2009
- I don't know if the snowflake thing was an accident, but did you know that sticking your head in ice can spike your memory if you concentrate? Keep it up though.
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- Kurenai Misery - 07/31/2009
- wow this is really good ^^ plz keep writing ^^
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- Spunk_Ransom_lover - 07/31/2009
- this is really good, i only see a few grammatical errors. i loved how you used the snowflake to trigger the boy's memory and tell the audience what happened to the boy. i hope you'll continue, because i would sure like to read more.
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