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Characters
Toren/Thomas--- 13--- He is the son of the Master Of Darkness. He is Prince Of Darkness.
Rastor/Richard--- Toren’s father. Doesn’t understand Toren’s desire for a normal life.
Skylar--- 12--- Toren’s friend from school. She is the only one in school that isn’t scared of him. She is also the only one in school that calls him Toren.
William--- 15--- Skylar’s older brother. He doesn’t like Toren. He fears for his sister.
There was a time when darkness ruled our world. We were ruled by the Master Of Darkness. He was soon overthrown. Legend says, that after the Master of Darkness has a son he will grow strong again. The nurse walked into the hospital lobby.
“Richard Dans. You’re wife has had a baby boy.”
And so, in the year 1995 Toren (Thomas), prince of darkness was born, and the time of darkness begins again.
[12 years later
Chapter one
“Master Toren, your father wishes to speak to you before school.”
“Thanks for the message Gregory.” I rolled my eyes as I picked up my schoolbag. Dad just probably wanted to remind me to strike fear in everyone who crosses my path. The usual Prince Of Darkness lesson he always gives me. Although, he pretty much has that covered on his own. I knocked on the door to dad’s study.
“Who is it?” He boomed.
“It’s me dad.”
The door opened and I saw my dad. I had to fight to keep a straight face. While I was dressed in my Guitar Hero tee and jeans, dad was dressed in a white tuxedo shirt, a black cloak and a matching cape. (Think of Snape’s outfit in Harry Potter crossed with Dracula.)
“Hello Toren.” My father scowled.
I took a knee like a knight in front of a king. All part of morning ritual in our house.
“Father.” My dad didn’t even notice my sarcasm.
“Come in Toren.”
Dad’s study (He calls it a lair.) is basically the stereotypical room where a dark lord of medieval times would stay. It is as dark as a dungeon and on the desk was a huge spell book.
“Son, you must start your training.” Dad’s face was solemn.
“Training father?”
“As a necromancer.”
- Title: Son of the necromancer
- Artist: tiffyskel
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Description:
this is the first chapter of a story i'm working on. This is my first post so plz don't b too harsh
Thomas (Toren) Dans is the son of the master of darkness. Everyone is afraid of him because of his father who is a cruel dictator and one of the most evil men around. He only has one friend, Skylar. When she is kidnapped by Thomas' father it is up to Thomas and Skylar's brother William to put aside their differences and save her. - Date: 07/18/2009
- Tags: necromancer
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Comments (4 Comments)
- We Are Nobody - 12/03/2009
- Its interesting, and kind of well written. But, you didn't need to give us info on the characters at the beginning, that just shows your too lazy to build them up as the story goes by. ><
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- tiffyskel - 07/19/2009
- thanks arahsay i definitly will! Thanks for the advice XxXGreen
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- hollypup10 - 07/19/2009
- oooooo me likey tiffy good job. i think u should keep typing this!
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- X - H i s L o v e S o n g - 07/18/2009
- dont worry. i thought it was pretty good. but this shouldnt be harsh for i am a writer myself, even though i agree that some of my poems in my journal arent all that great, but anyways, try to not sound so mediavalish, if you no what i mean. because farther in the story, probably around the middle (somewhere close to there) your reader will probably start to thinkt hats its getting old... so dont use to much of the medivail to much in the book, but so far.. ITS GOOD!! 4/5
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