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I should have known it would end like this. I'm no rocket scientist, but even I saw it coming. This is what happens to people who mess with fate. Fate turns around and kicks them. Though, I'm not gonna say that i regret doing what i did. Ugh. Look at me. I'm being all mushy just beacuse I'm about to die. Im not sure why it went wrong, other than the fact that i bent the rule. Maybe it finally snapped. I dont know. Well, I guess you wanna know what happened...or maybe not. Either way, I'm gonna tell you.
"GALAXY!" Screamed my step mom from the bottom of the stairs. I groaned. I hate it when she called me by my first name. Who names their child Galaxy?! "What?" I hollered back from the top of the stairs. "I KNOW you arent up there with that low life boyfriend of yours!" She spat. Anger swelled up inside of me. "He is allowed to be in my room until 10 p.m. Margret!" I yelled. "I'm gonna tell your father about this." She snickered. I just rolled my eyes. "I dont care what either one of you says. I love Jaden! You two WONT stop me from seeing him." I stormed back into my room. As I flopped down on my bed, Jaden sat down beside me. "You love me?" He asked in a quite voice. I froze. Did i make a mistake? "Yeah." I whispered. "Oh." He looked down. "I'm sorry Jaden. I didnt mean to say it. I understand that you dont love me." I fely my heart go all weird at those words. His eyes snapped up to me. "Of course i love you! I just didnt want to tell you this until later..."He broke off, looking at the floor again. My mind came up with a millions things he was going to say. "I'm not what you think I am Milky Way." He started, using my nickname.
"What do you mean?" I asked. "You are Jaden Carte, a Junior at Millington High, my boyfriend, an amazing person...""I mean, what do you think I am? Like...gosh how do i explain this?!" He looked frusturated. "Uhm..." I was confused. "You're a person?" I tried to be as broad as possible. "What exactly are people?" He asked. "Uhhh...humans?"I was totally lost. "YES! I'm....not...human..." He said slowly, and unsure. "Wait. What?" My head was spinning. "I'm a paracrytic." He looked confused. "A what?" I asked as i scooted away slightly. He didnt notice my movement. "Have you ever noticed that you're slightly colder when you're around me?" He asked. "Uhm...no..."I lied. I always did seem just a little bit chilled around him, but nothing too bad. "Paracrytics draw out heat from surrounding things. I tried my best to not draw from you, but it cant be helped." I eased up. "Oh. Well thats not bad." I laughed. I was expecting something like vampire, or werewolf. "You dont understand. I could kill you without meaning to. I could accidently suck all the heat out of your body leaving you an ice cube." He sounded upset. "But you wont. I know that." I whispered. "Its also illegal for me to date you.." He whispered. "What?" I questioned. "If the head of my government found this out, they would instantly kill you, and torture me." He cringed at the thought of it.
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- | Submitted on 07/06/2009 |
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- Title: Paracrytic
- Artist: xxneonxnightxlifexx
- Description: I just randomly made this up as i went along. PLEASE comment and tell me if its good, and if i should continue...
- Date: 07/06/2009
- Tags: paracrytic
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Comments (5 Comments)
- xxneonxnightxlifexx - 07/20/2009
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im not finished yet.
trust me. the intro WILL fit in =P
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- Julesz718 - 07/13/2009
- I somewhat agree wit Falina, itsz pretty gud tho nd i think tht u shud continue it ^_^
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- Taxidermy Royalty - 07/13/2009
- meh, it's okay. the conclusion is too...non-conclusion-y...and...the plot seems strange. At least you /didn't/ use a vampire/werewolf etc. But the intro doesn't fit in with any of the rest of the story; and your paragraphs are wonky. Rule of thumb; every time a new person starts talking, you start a new paragraph. 3/5, it's not bad though~ >wo
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- xxneonxnightxlifexx - 07/08/2009
- please dont rate me 5 starts just cuz i read your story. rate it based on how good or bad it is please.
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- i rock yur wirld - 07/07/2009
- ill give u a five if u read mineits called my story tell me wen u read it
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