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She was breathing. Her wings were gone. SHE WAS ALIVE.
Sereeb stared at her hands. Was she really alive? At the back of her throut, she felt a strange sensation. Being in heaven for so long, she had forgotten what it was like to be alive! What was she forgetting? The sensation began to become more intense, and Sereeb began to panic. What was it that was causing the sensation? "TO BREATH!" She shouted. It struck her mind like lightning. In order to live, you have to breath. In, out. In, out. Hey, she thought, this isn't so hard... Ok, she got that down, now, what else? "Um..." Her mind was still drowsy and shocked. If she couldn't fly, how did the living move? She looked down, at her originally useless feet. She would have to..to... what was the word? Oh yeah: walk. She searched her mind for the way to do it, then remembered. Step, Step, Step... left, right, left, right... She toddled around like a baby, then slowly but surely began to walk more like an adult. Then she was running. She ran and ran and ran, as fast as a horse. That is, until she stepped on a sharp stone that was sticking up.
She yelped from the pain, then shouted to the sun, "WHAT IS IT WITH ME AND ROCKS?!" Then she remember what the sensation was called. This... was pain. Her father had told her about it... He had told her that pain was a terrible thing and that those who were in Hell faced extreme pain.. forever... Sereeb shivered at the thought. now... Where to go now? She was in a crater, with red earth surronding her. She looked up toward the sky. All that was left... was up.
Thanks for reading! Comments are apreciated! please rate, or gve me CONSTRUCTIVE critism. thanks!i hope you look forward to reading : Earthly Angel part 3!
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- | Submitted on 06/29/2009 |
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- Title: Earthly Angel, part 3!
- Artist: Blue Forgotten Angel
- Description: THE second part of Earthly Angel, this is coming along rlly good! Please comment and/or give CONSTRUCTIVE critism. Saying something like "This is crap" is not going to help me make this book better. K? THANKS FOR READING
- Date: 06/29/2009
- Tags: earthly angel part
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Comments (2 Comments)
- Delia815 - 07/11/2009
- OMJ!!!! (Oh My Jonas) That was AWSOME!! I liked how u put in how she was learning about breathing and walking and pain. Can't wait for part 3!
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- bloodblackrose25 - 07/04/2009
- part 3 ... part 3... were is part 3 i need part 3!!!!
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