- zen,with a mother named jejo and a father that is seving in the riryano army.zen didn't get much attention but one day that was all about to change...here is his saga:as soon as i got (zen) i ate some pancakes sweetend with just a barely noticable hint of brown sugar and a small cup of pineapple juice.as i was walking to the warrior's academy i had heard a shriek from a lady struggling with her newly washed clothes,there was a mugger trying to pickpocket her.luckily there was a small dagger from the blacksmith's lying on his counter,i picked in up along with some tin armor.the lady by now was struggling with her goods,i took the dagger and jammed it in the muggers' back and drop kicked it through his heart,he fell down almost on contact and died.the lady,his classmate serio's mom jill gave him a big hug of relief and gave him about four bronze coins for his help.then when he was in school they trained basic defence and reversal teqnices.then after classes serio walked home with zen,when she was at her door she gave him a small kiss on his cheek and she said"thank you a ton for helping my mother out,i really appreciated that,ill be seeing you!"..speechless and half surprised that one of the most famous girls in his class kissed him.she walked in her door and closed it.zen then continued to his house to find a ransom letter for his mom and dad's capture.(continued)..thanks for reading!
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- -Deathly Destruction- - 05/26/2009
- No one's going to read a giant block of text. Learn to format. Check my only submission to this arena for a good example that could help you. Also, your grammar's all off- you've even left out spaces here and there. I'm sorry, but that's horrible. :/ Please proofread before submitting things to the arena next time as there's more mistakes in this than I can count, and study the mechanics of grammar and punctuation every spare moment you have if you want to get marginally serious about writing.
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