Daybrake vampires

• Artist: Princesses Allelujah
• Description: don't rate this yet i am not finished
• Date: 02/13/2009
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The beginning of creation

its said that the devil him self created us but its also said that the world and God created us...but what is true how was i born i mean my ancestors i have now idea but i believe the world created us and something provoked are growth. because its said that we would of died without any help for the vampire raise. we go by these laws now falling in love with a human, don't kill a human, and don't expose your self. in the day brake its hard not to thats why some go for moonlight. so there not around people its harder to feed then though but the think is not that hard we can go into peoples houses and we don't really kill are victims because the law is strict about that because they might find out what we are and hunt us down it has happened in the past i was just being born when that had happened and thats why both my parents are dead and yet i like to be around humans i want to be one my self. because not all humans think the same way some they want to be a vampire them selfs some they pity them.

The start of betrayal

going to school is complicated for me because my best friend is a human girl so she things.
i have to do something about this because i think she likes me more than a friend

Comments

[ur weenis]

*cough*, the grammar

[Gravetye]

Now that I know this unfinished, I guess I can see why it's so confusing. But still, try to revise the paragraphs when you do get around to finishing it. Capitalize and break it up into smaller paragraphs. Also add more punctuation.

[Gravetye]

So, the period key on your keyboard is there for a reason. And "shift." And "enter." This makes next to no sense in its current format.