Elizabeth

• Artist: alana2221
• Description: This is a story about a 13 year old girl .:)I hope u like the story.:) Also pls leave a comment !!!!!!!!!
• Date: 02/10/2009
• Tags: elizabeth

One day there was a girl named Elizabeth,she was a rich snotty brat.She got everything she wanted whenever she wanted but then one day she over heard her parents that they was going to have to get a smaller house and get rid of some of her things because they were about to go on bankrupcy. While her parents watry to find a different s talking she went in her parents room and barged in stopping them from talking so she was yelling and crying at them. She just kept saying that they are not going to get rid of any of her stuff or the house because she was a special kid and she also said that they had to listen to her or she'll run away with her go-cart.So before she could say another word her dad yelled at her and said 'that she had to listen to them because they are her parents and if she didn't listen to him or her mom he would really be mad and she will be grounded for 2 months from everything if she said another word. After the fight was over she said to one of her maid that she was going to kill herself if they got rid of this house or any of her things but the only way she won't kill herself was if she got what ever she wanted or if they get a bigger house. So Elisa the maid was afraid that that was going to happen so she told Elizabeth's parents and Elizabeth's mother was terrified if she done it so she got bodyguards and cameras for her daughter because she doesn't want that to happen. Then after Elisa told them about that her parents had a talk with her about that and said that they have to move to a smaller house because they were going to lose everything if they didn't move to a smaller house. Also her dad said 'that he was laid of and he was going to try to get a different job till he got his job back.



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Comments

[bloodmamba19]

I really think that you need to expand your vocabulary. The fact that in the very first sentance you have a large gramatical error means that if you want to be a writer you need to read alot more to widen your writing understanding.

[Tweed and the Trolls]

Sorry to say, but that was terrible. The story has already been told a hundred times before and you have a very small vocabularly. You can't really have a story, because you give away all the details in the begininning.I don't want to be mean, but you have to learn to write in away that connects your readers to the story. That was just a bore. Back to the drawing board.