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I was on my computer and i can't even see the images on the screen there was such a glare. I sighed and turned it off. I was a sixteen year old female in high school. Currently on the top of my class. I ,appearently, strike people as a little odd. No one knows where i live. I live in secretcy. I'm always skipping some class and people wonder why I'm at the top of the class and they're not...
Both of my mom and dad are dead, and I'm not living with any other reletives. I've lived alone for a while. Maybe 6 years. I tend to lose count after a while. The death of them were unexplainable. Not enough evidence was left behind for the police to tell who the suspect was. You would've thought that I'd be sad, but strangely, i wasn't. My mom was a drug addict and my dad was in prison all the time. So I was slightly happy that they were gone. Whoever did this was a geinus. And what do you know, that geinus was me. Yes I did it. I was sick and tired of my mom causing my asma problems to get out of control and she wouldn't do a thing about it. Putting burning cigarettes on my arm. I had enough. So I killed her. My dad always walked past me without even knowing that i was there. He never answered my questions. So i had to kill him as well. And I'll tell you something. I don't regret it.
- by xa currupt conclusionxx |
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- | Submitted on 02/03/2009 |
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- Title: The Unexplainable
- Artist: xa currupt conclusionxx
- Description: tell me what you think. if there are some changes that need to be made, say so. it might be boring at first but it'll get your attention in the second paragraph. I'm sorry if i couldn't write a lot. i had to leave.
- Date: 02/03/2009
- Tags: unexplainable
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Comments (6 Comments)
- HottButler - 08/12/2009
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i think this is a little lame beacuse you explain urself, your situation and ur parents. and then randomly "I killed her" its good, except you need to build up more. Like, after "I had had enough" start talking about the day you killed ur 'mother' blah blah blah. you see what im saying?
this could be a relaly great piece. It has potential
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- xXxThe_Lady_Of_ChaosxXx - 07/15/2009
- I understand that this is a fictional piece, and I give it a four for creativity. It is a little short but you do with mininal effort get your point across. It could be turned into a monolouge with utterly simplistic effort. I say keep on writing.
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- xa currupt conclusionxx - 05/21/2009
- why in living hell would i say that i killed my parents out in the open? it's not true. its just something i felt like writing that had been stuck in my head for a long while. i am only 13, and i live with my mom. if i did say that this was true, there'd be no doubt that i'd get arrested or sued.
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- Fayne Darkness - 02/17/2009
- Hmm... Can't say too much about it. I find it too short to comment. Is this a story you are working on? If it is, its not bad a start, but you say what happened to fast. If it is real, I do not believe it, either.
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- Jellybean Julie - 02/13/2009
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is this based on a true story
cuz i dont believe it one bit - Report As Spam
- Angel blood_Devil heart - 02/11/2009
- Wow that was really...scary, but also really good 5/5
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