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Chapter 1
The New Assistant
“Another experiment gone wrong, I need another assistant, but who would accept a job as an assistant to a 15 year old genius?” Lucy has long blond hair down to her kneecaps blue eyes, is a 15 year old genius who owns her own lab and experiments on animals, and if she gets a good result she will try it on humans although she is finding that her formulas have a different effect on humans.
As Lucy searched she arrived in a dark alley, and notices a boy crying.
“What happened,” she said softly to the boy. The boy had blue eyes short but really curly hair something around his wrist and was less than 5 feet in height. As the boy struggled to find the words he was finally able to say,
“My parents are dead!” When Lucy got over the shock she realized the boy couldn’t be much over 12 and that he had a big cut down his leg. Just as Lucy got ready to ask the boy about his cut he whimpered,
“Well actually my foster parents were killed, I was left at the front door of an orphanage.” Before Lucy could think about anything she just blurted out,
“Do you want to come with me as my new lab assistant?
The boy decided he had nothing better to do so he decided to go with her as her new lab assistant. At the lab Lucy stopped the boy at the front door and told him that there is no turning back after he enters the front doors and signs a contract. The boy’s response is,
“I don’t care, my birth parents abandoned me, and my foster parents where killed so how can it get any worse.
“I just thought it wouldn’t be fair not to warn you.”
The boy, ignoring the warning, entered the lab and found some of the most strangest things, vials full of multi coloured liquids some rats in cages with little wings and whiskers the seize of a Honda car, some love birds the seize of a golden retriever, a golden retriever (full grown) the seize of a love bird. Some blue prints of mechanical things such as a robot to a super vacuum. There are about 12 different pieces of paper with a whole bunch of different chemicals.
“This is your lab Lucy?” the boy asked.
“Of course not my lab is the one next door,” Lucy replied.
In the next room (Lucy’s lab) there were rats running around on the ground that were the size of the boys arm, it was twice the size of the other room it was a big mess, a leak in the roof, a bunch of chemicals around the room, rat poison on the floor, the only thing that wasn’t messy was shelves with a bunch of vials of multi coloured liquids like in the other room only these vials had labels on them.
“This place is a dump!” said the boy.
“Well then you should start cleaning after all that is part of your new job as my new assistant, and tell me your name!” Lucy snapped.
“My name is Sean,” the boy replied.
“Well then Sean you can start by mopping up all the radioactive waste on the floor, the mop is in the closet south-east of you,” Lucy told Sean.
“What time is it?” asked Sean.
“It’s 4:00 P.M, Lucy told him. So Sean looked out the window and mumbled to himself: “if its 4:00 in the afternoon and the sun rises in the east, then that must mean that I am facing west so that must be the closet with the mop,” Sean finally finished. “That is the closet with the mop,” Sean said pointing to the door behind him.
“Bravo, bravo you are the third out of 25 people to get it right so you can be my third assistant,” Lucy said clapping. “You still have to mop up the radioactive waste though.
After Sean finished mopping up the radioactive waste he had to clean all the tables and chairs, after he finished that he had to dust the lab, after he finished that he had to find the switch to his bed (that popped out of the wall). After an hour of looking for the switch he finally found it in a stuffed animal with a zipper on its back. He had to wash the sheets and the bedspread and then the deadline was supper which of course he didn’t make it by so he had to skip supper and finally at 1:00 A.M he finished his tasks for the day so he finally got to bed after his exhausting day.
The next morning at 8:00 A.M Lucy came into her lab where Sean was asleep banging pots and pans literally to wake Sean up. As Sean rolled over, he freaked out from the pots and pans and he fell out of bed.
“Hey lazy, get up and make me breakfast. I am hungry!” Lucy demanded.
“At least say please after waking me up so rudely”, Sean said.
“You are my assistant do as I tell not the other way around, Lucy yelled. “What can you make, Sean?” Lucy asked.
“I can make eggs, pan cakes, oat meal or blue berry muffins if you have the right ingredients,” Sean replied.
“Oh and one more thing, I… have a food allergy.”
“You have a what?” Lucy said raising her voice.
“A food allergy, Sean said again.
“I heard you the first time, but what are you allergic too?” Lucy asked.
“I am allergic to corn, which is in a lot more things than you would think,” Sean replied.
Lucy was a lot more sympathetic towards Sean after he told her about his food allergy. At first she thought he was lying, but after he explained to her the more she believed him. “Here is 150$ to go buy organic food and whatever you need to buy so you don’t get sick,” Lucy said giving Sean a whole bunch of money.
“Thank you,” Sean said.
“You’re welcome,” Lucy replied.
Sean went to Roots (an organic store) and bought a whole bunch of organic food. Reading all the ingredients, of course. After he got back he washed all the dishes to make sure there weren’t any traces of corn so he wouldn’t get sick. After all the dishes were washed he made pan cakes for brunch.
An hour after eating Sean was all happy with himself. Lucy finally asked Sean why he was so happy.
“That was the first time I made pancakes,” Sean said. “I cooked them before but that was the first time I ever mixed all the ingredients, and I didn’t get sick.” Lucy was very stunned after Sean said that.
“Well they were very good, especially for your first time making them.
“I am going to my study to go look up some stuff,” Lucy said.
“See ya,” Sean replied. “Oh and what should I do while you do that?”
“I have a virtual reality helmet and gloves and a virtual reality console in the next room go entertain yourself with it, and it’s a set,” Lucy told him.
“Cool!” Sean said excitedly. So Lucy went to go study but what is she going to study?
- by ruby_sunny |
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- | Submitted on 12/07/2008 |
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- Title: Chapter 1: the new assistant
- Artist: ruby_sunny
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book 1 chapter 1 of my book its on going still
please rate my story and i am open to critisism - Date: 12/07/2008
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Comments (5 Comments)
- zaj muas - 09/02/2009
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its good though you may need to add some details
you've pointed out the way the characters looked, but you need to ad emotion into the characters (though you did a few times)
other than that it was great ^_^ - Report As Spam
- xXx-Live Out Loud-xXx - 06/16/2009
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It seems very.... struck. It has an amazing dialogue and thought, but if you could put it in more details and good flow that would be wonderful biggrin
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- Vankar - 03/25/2009
- The characters dont seem anywhere close to real. They seem very two dimensional to me. You may want to figure out who you really want them to be like, and have change happen over time, over just suddenly changing and then reverting back again. Define the main character a bit more first also, tell her back story a bit, and also explain what she does other then just throwing out strange things that are in her lab.
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- Weakened As I Am - 12/08/2008
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Ack, got cut off.
Anyway, you need to include more of your characters' inner thoughts, so you can give them depth and personality.
You've got a good deal of potential. Refine your writing, and I'm sure your work will be even better in the future.
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- Weakened As I Am - 12/08/2008
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Well, you have a distinct voice and a flair for description, I'll give you that.
However, your grammar needs serious improvement, and your dialogue doesn't flow well. The events themselves seem rather disjointed and random, with no transitions - what happens between her walking out the door and then finding the boy crying?
You might want to give more background on your characters, as well as a bit more about how they affect each other - for example, does she annoy him? Does he disgust her - Report As Spam