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Chapter 1
*sigh*, as I walks down the hall to my new dorm room with her bags, "I can't believe this! How can my parents let me be here"
As I walks in my new roommates come to greet her with big smiles.
"HI I'm Angle Strike", she said all hyper like. She was a blonde with bright baby blue eyes.
"I'm Maranda Middleson", she was a brunett with deep green eyes, "and you?"
She didn't sound to peppy like Angle was.
My face turned bright red, "ummm....Okami Izumi"
"Like totally AWESOME" she said with a big smile on her face.
"Thats a weird hair color, did you dye it" Maranda said questionaly.
I didn't want to tell them i was born with white hair or my eyes were blood red.OR the fact that i was part demon!!!!NO WAY!!!! can't tell them that
"ummmm......." i said frightenly "Yeah i dyed it"
"But what about your eyes? They're like.....red." Angle said
"Damnit",I thought, how can I explain THAT to them?! But before i could say anything Angle spoke again.
"You'll be a great match for Kira"
"yeah" Maranda agreed.
"Whos Kira" i said raising and eyebrow.
"He's this wired kid who kninda has the same color hair as you and the same color eyes" Maranda said
"I think hes emo" Angle said. "Do you wanna meet him"
I turned bright red again. "ummmmm.........well.......maybe"
"I'll take that as a yes" Angle said. "meet him at this area tomorrow at noon, hes always there." She wrote down the area, then gave it to me It said: The Quad, tree to the left
- by XxDark_Chibi_OkamixX |
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- | Submitted on 10/27/2008 |
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- Title: Something Missing
- Artist: XxDark_Chibi_OkamixX
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Description:
This is about a girl that goes to a bording school for the next 3 years. Theres love, drama, action and bravey. plz enjoy this story.
NOTE: this is coming from the top of my head. i didnt plan it out - Date: 10/27/2008
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Comments (5 Comments)
- ClassyZebra - 05/17/2009
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Please note" the following is constructive criticism:
It needs to be proofread, but is an EXCELLENT basis for a good story.
Also, It kinda goes by fast. Put in more descriptions, and start it a little farther back. Like maybe on the way to the boarding school. That would give time to explain the situation.
Your fellow writer,
Jenkinsororo
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- Fish2themoon - 11/12/2008
- ur really good, please think of more as soon as u can. tell me when u do ok?!?! blaugh
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- XxDark_Chibi_OkamixX - 10/27/2008
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thanx u guyz
i never been commented like this on any of my writings i did in school, i though i always suck at writing. and i do read alot. i mostly got my ideas from anime and mangas^^ - Report As Spam
- releaser_of_dreams - 10/27/2008
- What a wonderful story!! I can't wait for the next chapters to come. Please message me when you have more??
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- Kendal345 - 10/27/2008
- Hey I luv your story! I think you've got great potiental!! You could seriously become a writer one day! I bet you read a lot to get that kind of amazing result in writing! I' m not teasing you cause I read a lot too! Awesome, keep it up!
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