Scared for life

• Artist: blackdeath144
• Description: this is a story that i am making up as i go so it might not be that good..but its jsut random
• Date: 10/22/2008
• Tags: scared life

My name is Edward. this story starts about a year ago so let me take you back to the start.....I woke up got dressed in black skinny jeans and I put on my green shirt that read "Just cause i am emo doesnt mean I have no feelings" I have no idea where I got hat shirt but its my favorite. I walkd to the bus stop it was so cold i thought that i might snow. then right before the bus stopped it started to snow white little flakes. I got on the bus and walked to the last sit on the bus and sat down. i looked up and everyone moved away from me. I but my purple Ipod head phones in my ears and turned it all the way up i was listening to Hawthorne Heiaghts life on stand by...thats a song that i cry too. not the story really starts...






Readers note: this is really boring but if you want wait longer for some more....

Comments

[Mitsuki Izuka]

This... really sucks. No offense. Bad grammar, bad spelling, bad "main idea". And you really need to learn how to put in commas.

[Pathogenous]

This reeks of 'My Immortal'. That's not a compliment.

1: Dig some originality up from somewhere.
2: Sort out that grammar, it's insulting.

[Julia Dream]

This fills me with a rage to rival all rages. This fills me with an urge to kick puppies and stab random passers-by. This is such a horrible piece of work, I'm surprised that my face didn't start melting like those Nazi faces at the end of Raiders of the Lost Ark.

Horrible spelling, horrible grammar, horrible concept, horrible idea, read a god damn book before you try and write a story.

[ninja-kyoko-chan]

i agree with the previous comment
but please keep writing!
trust me, something random can really turn into a very interesting piece of work

[xx--Moonlit Misery]

it sounds like a good beginning, but the spelling and caps needs some work...