Horizon

• Artist: Nargai
• Description: Sweet
• Date: 08/12/2008
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(Nargai is on the skyisland of love and sees a dragon in the distance and a guy jumps off)Nargai: NJ what are you doing here it is forbidden for you to be here you must leave NJ: NO! NARGAI: what are here for NJ: I AM HERE TO KILLL YOU!(SCREAM)MAKES BEAST. NARGAI DEMON: I WILL KILL YOU!(RUNING WHITH SWORD TO CUT OFF ARM OF BEAST) (USES LOVE CHARM ON NJ SCREAM IN LOVE AND USES DEATH CHARM ON NARGAI) MAKES CUPIDS BOW AND ARROW AND SHOOTS NJ IN THE HEART AND NJ DISAPPERS.
NARGAI SEES A FLAME IN THE DISTANCE AND IT SEEMS TO WALK CLOSER NARGAI NOW SEES A GUY MADE OUT OF ROCK AND FIRE AND ASKS WHY HE IS HERE AND THE GUY OF FIRE TELLS NARGAI HIS NAME AND IT IS SOBBA OF CHUKUL AND NARGAI TELLS HIM HIS NAME.I AM NARGAI OF THE LOVE AND I HAVE CUPID TRAPED INSIDE ME.I FEEL LOVE BURNING INSIDE ME EVERY DAY I BREATH THE AIR IN THE SKY.I AM SOBBA OF CHUKUL AND I HAVE A DEMON TRAPED INSIDE ME FOREVER.I WILL FIGHT FOREVER TO FREE THE DEMON AND KILL HIM FOREVER.W WHAT WHOS THERE ? IT IS JAKE OF ICE.SOBBA DO YOU WANT TO JOIN ME ON MY ENDLESS QUEST OF LOVE?NARGAI I WOULD LIKE TO JOIN YOU ON YOUR ENDLESS QUEST OF LOVE.JACK:CAN I JOIN YOU ON YOUR ENDLESS QUEST OF LOVE?NARGAI:YES!SOBBA:LETS TRAIN(MAKES A FIRE)NARGAI:OK(TRANSFORMS TO DEMON FORM)JACK MAKES A GAINT BLOCK OF ICE.NARGAI AND SOBBA FIGHT JACK TRAINS WHITH WATER.NARGAI SHOOTS SOBBA WHITH A ARROW SOBBA BURNS NARGAI AND NARGAI CUTS SOBBA ON THE ARM WITH A SWORD NARGAI FLYS INTO THE SKY JACK AND SOBBA:YOU CAN FLY!!

Comments

[CyKa]

There are some sentences phrased quite beautifully, like: I FEEL LOVE BURNING INSIDE ME EVERY DAY I BREATH THE AIR IN THE SKY.
But it's very hard to read. I highly suggest not using all capitals, and maybe hitting enter between lines of thought so it isn't all just jumbled together? If there is a story here, you might try using more descriptive words and stuff then you have, because to me it read as a bunch of seperate sentences o.o;;. Keep up the work.